Computer in our daily life-draft1
Computers are playing an important role in our daily life. There are some instances. First, they have already been widely used at home as well as in industries. We use them to control the work of our washing machines, TV sets, DVD players, other electrical appliances, and so on. Second, we use them to play games and listen to music and see the film. Third, computers offer the convenience in communication, such as email, chat room, and webcam. How do we live without computers!Personally, I have a liking for computers. There are some reasons that I like computers. The most important of all, they help me increase my knowledge and widen my view, because I can get latest information and search information convenient. Then, I enjoy entertainment a lot, like listening to music and see other people’s photo and diary Next, I save much time while I’m shopping and send message to other people.
posted by Butterfly @ 8:44 PM
8 Comments:
1.we use them to play games "and" listen to music and see the film.
我覺得用，就可以了
2. How "can" we live without computers! 嗯…用can比較好
3.they help me "broaden" my knowledge and widen my view 用increase 怪怪的
4. I enjoy entertainment a lot, like listening to music ", seeing" other people’s photo and diary "."
5.沒有結論句…
How do we live without computers!應該用can
because I can get latest information and search information convenient.
兩個information有點不順
應該可以改別的詞看看
How do we live without computers!
(這句突然能讓我想像到你故作驚嘆的表情)
Then, I enjoy entertainment>>我覺得Then可以改Moreover之類的耶
people’s photo>>photo要加s巴
恩 沒有結論
我也能想像ㄟ
How "do" we live without computers
->can
I enjoy entertainment a lot->很怪
How "can" we live我覺得比較好ㄟ
I enjoy entertainment a lot
(應該有什麼詞可以代替吧!!總覺得不太通順ㄟ)
we use them to play games and listen to music and see the film.
應該改we use them to play games "," listen to music and see the film.
兩個and很怪。
we use them to play games and listen to music and see the film.用逗號代替第一個and會比較好吧！
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