A Frightening Experience-draft1
On a rainy day, I hurried to the cram school. On the way, I heard an old man crying. I hesitated to think whether I should help him or not since I was almost late. Eventually, I decided to come to his aid and to go toward to him to ask what had happened. He told me that he lost his way home, having no money to take a taxi. I tried to comfort him and took him to the police station. On our way, he suddenly stopped. When I turned to him, he zipped down his trousers. What made me more scared was that he didn’t wear underpants. I was so shocked by what he did that I could hardly move for several seconds. While he was coming close to me with a strange smile, I ran at full speed and cried loudly for help at not time. He chased behind me and angrily shouted when I ran to the police station as fast as possible. A few minutes later, I didn’t hear his voice. As I turned back slowly and shiveringly, he disappeared. Maybe he saw the police station and gave up chasing me. How terrible and frightening an experience it is! Probably next time I’ll think twice before I lend other people a helping hand.
posted by Butterfly @ 4:12 AM
8 Comments:
I decided to come to his aid and to go "toward to" him to ask what had happened.那個 toward要加to嗎??
感覺這具好多to喔 = =""
at not time是什麼阿??
哈~我是第一個=ˇ=
I decided to come to his aid and to go toward to him to ask what had happened.
這句真的太多to
可以把come to his aid改成give him a helping hand
不然可以把to go toward to him改成 approached him
這樣一下子就少了兩個to了
不然你一句裡整整有5個to!
1.I decided to come to his aid and to go toward him to不用吧
追妳那段還滿瞎的
1..Eventually, I decided to come to his aid and to go toward to him to ask what had happened.你to也太多了吧!可以改一下嗎?
2..怎麼跟你說的不太一樣呢?
妳可以跟阿嬤比誰寫得多了,為什麼我覺得像喜劇阿
at not time是什麼阿,我都查不到
and to go toward to him>>to應該不用吧
What made me more scared was that he didn’t>>that 省略比較順的感覺
好好笑...怎麼辦...你真的很會加劇情
妳找到第二份工作了，大編劇。
at no time吧!!
還真ㄉ很多"to"咧!!
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